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Pro's: *Facedesks* Yet another job well done! (I also thank you for providing something to be critiqued, I've been wanting to Critique someone but I couldn't find much with all the visual artists...Anyway enough rambling on.) Chocolate probation? I'd hate that. I looooooove my chocolate! ....Oh right critique. As always MAGIC SPOON! You've kept me in the dark for how long? And a closet? Is this some kind of messed up/randomly amazing video game? Eh whatever it's always good to read your work.

Cons: The bad thing is not being able to found anything bad. Though I'm pretty sure there was one or two mistakes. Like you had 'stared' instead of 'started that bar fight' but I think that is about it.

Rating time!! (If I can remember how I do it. xD)

Creativity: 4/5
Story-line: 4/5
Characters: 4/5
Originality: 4/5

Over all: 26/30

Over all comment: Always a pleasure to read your work, I love magic and apparently magic spoons that otherwise don't exist in the real world, then again for all we know they could. o_o

But as always a great job.
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JediJoshus007 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hey, I'm glad you like, always nice to have a fan of my work. Chocolate yeah got to have my chocolate with peanut butter.
Ha! Video game, I guess it could be. Well let me get another piece done so you can have something to critique. ;P
rikkilee-robertson Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, can't wait. :):P
JediJoshus007 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
OK, all done. ;)
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