Just another ordinary day, yeah right. part3 Damit Josh, what the frack are you doing? I think to myself as I doge trying my best not to get hit by on coming gun-fire and plasma blast. Doing that which I am trained to do, kill the enemy. “I’m up, he sees me, I’m down.” Almost there, damn I hope I’m right or my ass is as good as gone. I see my target and dive in; almost landing on the guy I shot down from the tree earlier. I look him over as I catch my breath. Yes! I knew I saw something big on this guy. It looked like and I hoped it was some space version of a hand-grenade. I take his blaster, just in time too, because the blast from Sarah had stopped.
Pros: I can see that your grammar and punctuation has gotten better, but I think I till saw at least one too, to and two mistake. It does get confusing and is a common mistake among a lot of writers. I like where you've taken the story, (and I keep saying I won't be able to critique you if you keep doing well xD) I really can't wait to see where it ends, if there is another story coming.
Cons: I can't find any cons. Which is a good thing. I really, really like the story as a whole.
Over all: 29/30
Over all comment: I find your style very interesting. I love reading your work. By far the best score I have given to anyone. Truly a good effort. ^^